I often time hear the question from parents of what are the benefits of my child learning the martial arts. There are many reasons for kids to become involved in martial arts that go far beyond learning how to protect themselves. Many parents think that by their child learning how to protect themselves and stand up for themselves, that their child will build confidence in other areas of their day to day life. This is only a small part of what training in the martial arts can do for a child.
Several studies have shown that after school activities or activities done in a structured environment not only help children with learning how to interact with others of the same age but also promote strong social development skills. This also holds true for children involved with martial arts.
Studies also show that children involved in the martial arts are much less likely to be involved with gang activity and recreational drug abuse.
I have personally seen some amazing behavioral transformations in the time I have been involved in the martial arts. Children with short attention spans and behavioral problems have made great strides in both areas. The children get help with staying on task and focusing on the goals ahead of them in a constructive atmosphere. Not only does a child learn for themselves how to stay on task but they see other children around them accomplishing the same objectives.
When viewed from the outside it is easy to think that the martial arts is about punching and kicking. This couldn't be farther from the truth. The main purpose of the martial arts is character building and then comes self defense. Don't get me wrong, learning how to defend yourself is a big part of it but when parents send their kids to a martial arts class they will be surprised how much more they are getting than a kid who can punch and kick. Self respect, self discipline, hard work and a set of moral ethics are all part of the end results of a good martial arts program.
Strong introduction and conclusion paragraphs! I really liked in the conclusion when you said this could be farther from the truth. I believe after school programs are necessary to build confidence too, but only if it is something the child likes to do. The spelling errors I found were personaly, likly, and themselfv. Awesome job it was a good and to the point read!
ReplyDeleteI like how you bring what you have seen personally into this blog. You use words that make your essay flow nicely
ReplyDeleteI couldnt agree with you more. Anything to get kids off their butts and away from video games! A few spelling errors. Overall good essay.
ReplyDeleteSome of your sentences could flow better for example; the opening statement. You might want to take time to read your words out loud to yourself. Your thoughts may flow perfectly in your head because you know what you're trying to say. However, putting them on to paper ends up entirely different. The point you are trying to make therefore becomes less clear. You argue a great "solution" to a problem that you fail to point out. Sure, the parents ask what the benefits are and you can respond with many, but I'm looking for a cause and effect in this essay. You also clearly defend the process of learning the art as a child but you fail to call the audience to action in response to a problem. You may have missed the purpose of this essay in the reading assignment.
ReplyDeleteNice start to your paper. Looks like you have quite a few points to support the main topic. A few grammar and punctuation mistakes. Great job sticking to the topic.
ReplyDeleteI think you have several good view points as to why Martial Arts is beneficial. There several good causes for Matrial Arts but maybe discuss more effects. I find this very interesting because I know nothing about it, and often think about starting our 4 year old, so it gives us many details.
ReplyDeleteYou made an excellent argument. It is often perceived wrong by people on the outside. Martial arts is a beautiful and wonderful thing. I like that you stated the other areas of a persons life often affected by learning the fine art. Thank You
ReplyDeleteI agree with you. Good job with the argument. You made some good points. Just a few spelling errors.
ReplyDeleteOnly a few punctuation mistakes, but other than that it was well written. I'm getting more and more interested in martial arts this semester, and I'm tempted to take a few lessons now.
ReplyDeleteAgreed: you do get much more than a kid who can punch and kick.
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